We've all heard the warning against
overwriting our screenplays by including too much camera direction
or too many slug lines. We worry about getting it wrong, because
we're professionals. Or at least we want our scripts to make us look
that way.
A little knowledge about how the pros use shot
headings will go a long way toward equipping us to make a
professional impression with every page we write. More than that, it
will empower us to harness the power of shot headings to propel
readers through pages that would otherwise bog down - or might not
get read at all.
During my years managing the script
processing department at Warner Bros., and in the years since then
when I've made my living as a film and television writer and as a
teacher of writers, I've found that we too often struggle
against script format, rather than making it work
for
us. Here's some insider know-how that will give you the ability to
use shot headings to your advantage. It comes from my
book
The Hollywood Standard: The Complete and Authoritative Guide
to Script Format and Style. Also called
scene
headings and
slug lines, shot headings can provide a wide
variety of information about a given scene or shot. They can be
short and sweet:
BOB Or long and
complicated:
EXT. WHITE HOUSE - SOUTH LAWN - CLOSE ON
CNN CORRESPONDENT - SUNSET (MARCH 15, 1999)How to
decide when to create a new shot heading
Including too
many shot headings or too few often creates problems for writers and
readers alike. Too many shot headings clutter a screenplay and can
make a writer appear amateurish. Too few shot headings leave the
reader confused and create headaches when production approaches.
In general, insert a new shot heading only when necessary.
Three rules of thumb provide guidance here:
1. Insert a
shot heading when there is a change in location or time.
Let's say we're inside the Oval Office (
INT. OVAL OFFICE
- DAY), and then cut outside to the Lincoln Memorial. We would
need a new shot heading along these lines:
EXT. LINCOLN MEMORIAL
- DAY. That's fairly straightforward.
Now let's say
we're in the Oval Office, then we cut to another scene in the same
location, but it's 90 minutes later. We need a new shot heading,
something like this:
INT. OVAL OFFICE - 90 MINUTES LATER or
SAME -90 MINUTES LATER.
Writers sometimes get into
trouble when a character moves from one location to another. The
following is incorrect:
INT. JOSIAH'S MOTOR HOME - NIGHT
The old guy pours himself a cup of coffee and steps outside.
He climbs painfully to the ground and looks up at the stars.
We're missing a shot heading that accounts for Josiah's
movement from an interior location to an exterior one, which may be
shot at a completely different time and place. The sequence should
be set up like this:
INT. JOSIAH' MOTOR HOME - NIGHT
The old guys pours himself a cup of coffee and steps
outside.
EXT. MOTOR HOME - NIGHT
He climbs painfully
to the ground and looks up at the stars.2. Add shot
headings when necessary for the visual telling of the story.
Among the screenwriter's tasks is creating the visual
experience of the screen story in the imagination of the reader.
Shot headings are one of the essential tools for accomplishing this
task. If visual attention must be focused very specifically on a
small object or detail, an extreme close shot serves precisely that
purpose and is appropriate and justified. At other times, say in an
ordinary dialogue scene between two characters, it might not be
necessary to call attention to any particular visual detail and only
the initial master shot heading is required. Add shot headings of
the more visually specific sort only when you have a compelling
visual reason for doing so.
3. Add shot headings when
logic requires it.
Sometimes plain logic requires a new
shot heading. For example, after the shot heading
WILMA'S
POV, a new shot heading, such as
BACK TO SCENE, is
logically required before Wilma can appear again on screen.
Similarly, after an
EXTREME CLOSEUP ON GNAT'S LITTLE TOE,
logic requires a new shot heading before the expanse of the Grand
Canyon may appear on screen.
4. Don't add a shot heading
where there is no new shot.
Sometimes writers set up as
a shot heading what is really just a movement of the camera. The
following is incorrect:
INT. SUBMARINE - GALLEY - NIGHT
Nason and his guys fight the fire. They know that at this
depth, they're fighting for their lives. But they're choking on the
smoke. And they're losing the battle.
PAN TO ENSIGN MENENDEZ
Leading in a fresh contingent of men to join the fight.
The pan is really just a camera move within the existing
shot and shouldn't logically be given a new shot heading. Instead,
format the sequence like this:
INT. SUBMARINE - GALLEY -
NIGHT
Nason and his guys fight the fire. They know that at
this depth, they're fighting for their lives. But they're choking on
the smoke. And they're losing the battle. PAN TO Ensign Menendez,
leading in a fresh contingent of men to join the fight.
Other common camera moves that don't logically warrant new
shot headings include
RACK FOCUS TO,
TILT or
PAN TO REVEAL and
ZOOM or
TRACK TO.
An important exception to this rule occurs when we start on
a closeup or an extreme closeup and pull back to reveal that we're
in a whole new location. For practical reasons (namely, that
production personnel need a new master shot heading to go with the
new location), a new shot heading is added.
Instead of this:
EXTREME CLOSEUP - WOMAN'S FIST
opens to show she
holds a house key. She inserts it in a doorknob. PULL BACK to reveal
Dotty opening the front door of Frank's house. Dotty lets herself
in. Do this:
EXTREME CLOSEUP - WOMAN'S FIST
opens to show she holds a house key. She inserts it in a
doorknob. PULL BACK to reveal:
EXT. FRANK'S HOUSE
Dotty opens the front door and lets herself in.
5. Add shot headings to break up long passages of action
and lend a sense of increased tempo.
The problem:
Because of the narrow column that even intermittent dialogue makes
down the center of the script page, a screenplay often contains a
great deal of white space. Add in the space around shot headings,
scene transitions and a few short paragraphs, and a typical script
page contains relatively few words, looks spacious and reads fairly
breezily. By contrast, action sequences, arguably the fastest-paced
sequences written for the screen, can appear in a script like dull
blocks of words crowding the page. Ironically, then, when an action
sequence obliterates too much of the white space, action can end up
reading so slowly that readers are tempted to skim it or even skip
it entirely.
The solution: Break up the action with
short shot headings to restore white space and help guide the
reader's eye down the page. Compare the following sequences, the
first with only a single master shot heading and the second with
additional shot headings inserted to break up the page.
INT. PARKING STRUCTURE - DAY
The immaculate
MOTOR HOME ROARS down the ramp into the underground garage, followed
by three squad cars. Michael cranks the steering wheel hard to the
right and the MOTOR HOME makes a SQUEALING turn. Ahead, a concrete
beam hangs low. Too low for the high-profile vehicle. Michael ducks
at the moment of IMPACT. The ROOF PEELS OFF the motor home with a
METALLIC SHRIEK.
The crumpled SHEET METAL BANGS off the hood
of a pursuing squad car. One of the cops slings a RIOT GUN out his
window and FIRES. The GLASS in Michael's WINDOW EXPLODES. He makes a
desperation left turn down another ramp but cuts the corner too
close. A long slab of METAL CURLS AWAY from the side of the motor
home like an orange peel. Michael plunges his giant convertible
deeper into the garage, his hair blowing in the open air. At the
bottom of the ramp, steel pipes crisscross the low ceiling. What's
left of the MOTOR HOME GRINDS against them and debris flies as the
big vehicle gets chopped down even shorter. Shreds of insulation,
stuffed animals and cooking utensils fill the air. A microwave oven
bounces onto the hood of a squad car and SMASHES THROUGH the
WINDSHIELD, landing in the empty passenger seat. Michael finds a
ramp sloping up toward daylight and heads for freedom, no longer
pursued, piloting the decimated chassis of what was once his proud
home. While this might be fun to watch on screen, it
looks fairly awful on the page. Here is the same action broken up
with intermediate shot headings that correspond roughly to the
various smaller pieces of action that make up the whole sequence:
INT. PARKING STRUCTURE - DAY
The immaculate
MOTOR HOME ROARS down the ramp into the underground garage, followed
by three squad cars.
MICHAEL
cranks the steering
wheel hard to the right and:
MOTOR HOME
makes a
SQUEALING turn. Ahead, a concrete beam hangs low. Too low for the
high-profile vehicle.
MICHAEL
ducks at the moment of
IMPACT. The ROOF PEELS OFF the motor home with a METALLIC SHRIEK.
CRUMPLED SHEET METAL
BANGS off the hood of a
pursuing squad car. One of the cops slings a RIOT GUN out his window
and FIRES.
ON MICHAEL
As the GLASS in his WINDOW
EXPLODES. He makes a desperation left turn down another ramp but
cuts the corner too close.
LONG SLAB OF METAL
CURLS
AWAY from the side of the motor home like an orange peel.
MICHAEL
plunges his giant convertible deeper into
the garage, his hair blowing in the open air.
AT BOTTOM OF
RAMP
Steel pipes crisscross the low ceiling. What's left of
the MOTOR HOME GRINDS against them and debris flies as the big
vehicle gets chopped down even shorter.
BEHIND MOTOR HOME
Shreds of insulation, stuffed animals and cooking utensils
fill the air. A microwave oven bounces onto the hood of a squad car
and SMASHES through the WINDSHIELD, landing in the empty passenger
seat.
MICHAEL
finds a ramp sloping up toward
daylight and heads for freedom, no longer pursued, piloting the
decimated chassis of what was once his proud home. The
passage now looks like an action sequence and reads like one. This
layout also gives production personnel the material they're going to
be shooting in more manageable bites. The downside for the writer
battling to keep a script's page count down is that this style uses
about twice as much space as leaving the text in a single block.
An important caution:
For all of the reasons noted
above, not every page in a screenplay should be sprinkled with so
many shot headings. Use this shot heading style sparingly and only
when it's genuinely justified.
Now you know what the pros
know about how and when and why to add shot headings. Use that
knowledge with confidence to make a strong, professional impression,
and to communicate your vision with clarity and
power.
About Christopher Riley
Christopher Riley is director of the acclaimed Act One Writing Program in Hollywood. His first film, After The Truth, an award-winning courtroom thriller written with his wife Kathleen, sparked international controversy when it was released in Germany. He has written for Touchstone, Paramount, Sean Connery's Fountainbridge Films, Mandalay and Fox, and is the author of The Hollywood Standard: The Complete and Authoritative Guide to Script Format and Style. He can be reached at
[email protected].